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Moscow Russia 06\05\13Dear Tom,Thank you for your letter. I'm really sorry for not writing so long, I had problem at school. But now everything is OK. In your letter you write about young people, who don't want to rely on their parents. So, many of my friends and Russian teens want to start new life after finishing of their schools. In the other words, they dream about buying their own flats, cars, beautiful clothes, but I don't haven such kind of dream, I want to live together with my family while I get married. And in fact, it's very expensive to rent a house in my country. I hear about your trip in Scotland, it's so interesting! Did you see Lohness lake? That towns did you visit in Scotland? And who did you travel with? Keep in touch.Best wishes,Julia